not a bad track sounds good all in all but would be better if it done more things, i think all your lackin is variation, cant really say much more as the quality isnt that great
The intro is ok. The drop: the bass says wow, wow, wow without that much feeling. Needs some....a lot more grit. The idea is fine, probably good, just needs more work on the bass sound. Resample. LFO. FX. Etc. Etc.