not cheesy at all man, its euphoric...love it!
I think you need to kill the build up 1 or 2 bars before it actually drops, strip it right back, no percussion or anything, just build the suspense up rather than adding the perc in...then Boom. (a bit like you did with the end of the breakdown, but without the drum roll into the drop)
mixdown needs work, its lacking warmth, bit better after ~2:15, but still a bit top and bottom heavy; prior to 2:15 you've got nice top end, percussions nice and shiney, kick and snare nice and punchy, and the sub is there, but needs more warmth, atm its all top end, sub and perc
double that vocal channel up, split them far left and far right, and give each channel a slightly variation in FX (really subtle difference, just enough to widen it a tiny bit, one way to do is simply with EQ, so you might have a 0.5db boost @ 2khz, and a 0.5db @1.5khz dip on the left channel, and then do the opposite on the right channel, so 0.5db dip @ 2khz, and 0.5db boost @ 1.5khz...or you could do it with reverb, have a slightly different filter/depth/tail length on each channel left and right, i really do mean "slightly" tho, the difference shouldn't be clearly audible, its just about separation of the stereo field...think in numbers smaller than 0.5 and you'll be good to go...this is a trick used on vocals in pretty much all commercial vocal tracks, called "doubling")
also the main saw synth aswell, could do with allot more warmth, sounds awesome in the top, but has no warmth and depth, maybe double the channel up, and drop one of them down an octave, and take some of the top end off it? obviously this is gona mean some more tweeking of the mix and EQ to balance things out, but without the warmth in the mid-range, its not sounding the way you intend
I think the second bit could be tightened up a bit aswell, after 2:15, its not far off at all, just needs a few EQ tweeks and more careful compression overall to really glue it all together
I look forward to hearing this finished...if you struggle with the mix, hit me up with a PM, I've got some time over xmas, would be happy to mix it down for you...i don't make allot of dnb like this any more, but i fookin love the style